fix essay 1

ther ask is to do some editing to the sentence structure, punctuations, and “tightening” the paper. By tightening  I mean If you see a sentence that can be rewritten to be more clear, do it. Use complex punctuation to fuse two sentences where appropriate. Take out any repeated or unnecessary words.

i need it by Tuesday 12/09/2014 at 1 pm, but if you can deliever it earlier that would be great.